Even though I said I’ve improved in my storytelling I don’t believe this is true for this piece. Original I had a much different ending that had a little resolution between the two characters but this one doesn’t have resolution. I think the ending short of works if all the characters were introduced at the same time but since they aren’t it just seems like a serial tv show repeating basically the same premise over and over. One of the actors wasn’t really good and talks you out real quick. When the special effects worked, they looked good but the problem is they don’t always look good. There were a few shots where the screen turned a shade of red. I noticed it happen but I didn’t know how that happen and how to fix it. The story is abnormal but I feel very predictable. I wish it had been a better writer because what this film needed was better dialogue between the actors. You had no scene of the characters expect they like their respective shows. I could have made one a Han Solo fan boy and another a Spock fan boy. Also “the line” was jump throughout even though it was attempted to be correct by flipping, it didn’t help all that much. There need to be more attention to costume and color. I had my actors a tan couch, in a tan shirt, and in front of with tan wallpaper. I was just so used to my apartment I didn’t realize how much it blurred depth until I began editing.
